Asheka Lawrence-Reid

  • Hi Cait! The entire time I was reading your post, I could not stop thinking that you probably have the most experience on stage so you would be more comfortable with public speaking than many of us. But as you pointed out, performance and public speaking are a little different. I agree with you that the whole nervous feeling thing is typically…[Read more]

  • Hi Lisa! Can you just transfer some of that confidence to me the next time we sit together? I also have no doubt that you will do absolutely great. Preparation is definitely a huge part of doing well when it comes to public speaking. Although that rarely works to relinquish my nerves, I rest assured that almost everyone will forget about my…[Read more]

  • I have had a strange relationship with public speaking over the years. I have absolutely no problem with speaking in public, but it depends on the audience. I took an Intro to Public Speaking class some years […]

  • I presented on Derek Walcott’s “Dream on Monkey Mountain” and paired it with “Chapter VI: Of the Training of Black Men” from The Souls of Black Folk by W.E.B Du Bois. The main focus of my discussio […]

  • Hi Cait! Sorry for the late response to your post. You have some great plans for the test. I totally agree that it is most important to finish reading more texts (I’m still working on it too). I like that you wrote, “arsenal”, like we’re going to war (sure feels like it). Since you want to write about identity in A Midsummer Night’s Dream and…[Read more]

  • Hello Lisa! Sorry I am just commenting on your post. Since you’re considering combining Incidents with Invisible Man and Gwendolyn Brooks’ poems, Du Bois could be helpful with doing a reading on racial identities. As for Sui Sin Far’s short story and Roy’s God of Small Things, you could also use theory to discuss the way these girls navigat…[Read more]

  • For my presentation on Emily Dickinson’s Poems, I focused on the genre category of the exam. I primarily used Seo Yeoung Chu’s discussion of cognitive estrangement and highlighted some significant aspects of […]

  • Disclaimer: This plan is tentative and is thus, subject to the whims of change over the next few days (not likely though).

    Selected Texts

    “The Dream of the Rood”
    Kazuo Ishiguro, The Buried Gian […]

    • Hey Asheka! You have a really good variety of texts here that you can draw from, so you should feel pretty good going into the next couple of weeks. I would perhaps suggest maybe finding more ways to use some of your other texts. For example, A Midsummer Night’s Dream, being a drama, could also be used for your drama section. I’m sure you know all the text very well, so I’d just say come back to your list again in a few days and reread it with fresh eyes. This kind of thing always helps me make new connections.

  • For my group’s presentation, I had the task of identifying the thinker or texts that help the writer build his argument. This was an incredibly exhausting task, granted that, Homi Bhabha’s introduction to Loc […]

  • Hey Caitlin
    Let me first say thank you for all your great feedback for my paper. It was all extremely encouraging as well as helpful. Now then, when you mention sources that deal with the history of mental illness, are you referring to that general umbrella or something more specific? If you had something specific in mind, it would be good to…[Read more]

  • Hi Lisa
    I want to thank you for all of your kind and helpful comments on my paper. That being said, I like the thought of finding counterarguments to Grandin and company’s claims. While you could find some useful information in the neuroscience arena as you have said, you can think about finding other individuals on the autism spectrum who do not…[Read more]

  • Professor’s feedback was most helpful for creating this list of tasks. I really have quite a bit to do.

    I need to establish my motive (which I’m still figuring out) , reorder paragraphs, connect the ide […]

    • I’d suggest starting with motive, in a very specific way. I would write a couple of paragraphs summarizing debates about “brainhood” and “transhumanism,” with attention to how your two primary texts relate to, illustrate, or complicate arguments made in these debates. You might include critics like Roth and Ortega and Vidal who make their arguments about brainhood in literature, or this might be a third paragraph. Think about this question: Do these shows do what Roth says literature does–“capitulate” to “reductive” ideas about neurological identity? Or do they do something more subtle and multi-faceted, as Ortega and Vidal suggest neuronovels do?

    • Hey Asheka,
      Its good to see that you have a plan of attack for this next phase of revision. I would agree with professor Tougaw that you should begin with motive; it will make all of the other things you need to do that much easier. I would also suggest that you not panic about how much there still is to do. It can seem like a lot sometimes, but all the work you are doing is going to really improve your paper and will get done! I’m excited to see the transformation that your paper will undergo as you continue to revise and establish your motive and a better articulated thesis.

  • Hey Caitlin! Sorry for the late comment. We weren’t group mates from the start so I wasn’t around for the early working out of your paper. But I’m glad we’re in the same group now and I hope to do the best I can to help you. Based on what you noted here, you had a specific set of plans for your draft and it seems you did most of them from our dis…[Read more]

  • I am extremely thankful for all the feedback I have received on my project. It is all really constructive and will surely help me with configuring my essay over the break. Everyone seemed to like that I am using […]

  • Hey Lisa! I really like your idea of connecting your sources based on the topic they discuss as if they were responding to each other. I also like the idea of getting a perspective from the k- 9 cop as well as the parents of children on the autism spectrum. But, I have to agree with Sara that interviewing them will not really work in your favor,…[Read more]

  • Hey Sara! Great to know that you’ve progressed a little beyond 70 words. I think the best thing for you to keep in mind is that this is just a draft. So, despite your OCD tendencies, which I can relate to, try to be rational and keep at it. You typically have very interesting and intelligent things to say so I’m sure you’ll be fine. Just type…[Read more]


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    So far, the only progress I’ve made is random […]

    • Hi Asheka! So far, so good! I’ve also been using Hayot’s “little bit at a time” strategy to make sure that I keep thinking about and making little spurts of progress. I’ve also been working on exactly identifying what parts of my primary sources I want to discuss, and isolating them– aka copying down all the quotes and paragraphs into a Google Doc so I don’t get distracted. This is harder with TV, but I’m only using about 15 minutes of a movie, and one major conversation so I just listened a few times and typed it up word-for-word. I have this annoyance with going back into all my sources all the time; I like having everything in one place. But it seems like you’re thinking about your topic and getting your writing together, so that’s good! It’s almost harder to figure out the thinking and organize it than sitting down to write (because you can always revise). Good job! You got this!

    • This sounds great. Keep at it–a little at a time. I think using images is a great idea.

      In the spring, if you want to integrate video, you could use a WordPress site for your project. There would be some sense in that.

      Don’t try TOO hard to sound “scholarly.” Sometimes that makes things awkward and unreadable. Just explain your ideas and your sources in clear prose.

    • I’m actually finding the same thing difficult as you are–analyzing film and TV. I’m so used to analyzing language that subconsciously and through classes I’ve learned how to develop a vocabulary for close reading and analysis of texts. I did take one media studies-type class in which I learned a bit about camera angle and stuff like that which I think will have to become part of our lexicon for analyzing our sources. I think something that may help you is finding sources that deal with film theory in general, because it will give you a sense of how to go about analyzing and using moving images. I think your approach to this whole paper is really smart–just trying to write and seeing where it goes. I’m way too much of a perfectionist to do that without a profound level of anxiety, but it seems to be working for you.

  • Hi Lisa! Really artistic Ballroom diagram you got there! You seem to be entering the scholarly conversation of understanding the animal mind though autistic individuals. Or was it the other way around? I was honestly unsure of this. I was surprised that you included limited information on the topic as one of your motivating moves because it seems…[Read more]

  • The foundation of your project seems to be about existentialism and lines between reality and animation. You make the right motivating moves of knowledge on the topic being limited and we learn about a larger phenomenon by studying this smaller one. Your sources are primarily scholarly, scientific sources, but have you thought of incorporating…[Read more]

  • Amen, Daniel G. Making a Good Brain Great: The Amen Clinic Program for Achieving and Sustaining Optimal Mental Performance. New York: Three Rivers, 2005. Print.

    Amen discusses ways of enhancing brain […]

    • First of all, your ballroom diagram is super cool and is making me feel bad about my lame stick-figure diagram. But anyway. Based on your annotated bibliography, it seems like you have two overarching threads running through your essay. One is about drugs being used for brain enhancement, and the second is about physical representations of consciousness in film. Honestly, I’m still not entirely sure how or why you’re connecting these two ideas. They seem kind of unrelated to each other. So I think one thing that you should try to consider as you write is exactly how you are going to connect these two ideas. I’m not saying you can’t, just that you shouldn’t assume that the reader will have a clear understanding of the connection. With that in mind, I do think you have plenty of research concerning brain enhancement and are slightly lacking in research concerning filmic representations of consciousness. For this aspect of your thesis, I would suggest looking into film theory in general; because its a visual medium, much of film theory involves questions of representation. Another suggestion that I think I mentioned in terms of your research proposal was that you may also want to consider genre as another way of analyzing your TV shows. The reason for this is because there are many TV shows and films out there that deal with the representation of consciousness, so it seems kind of random that you chose these two. So I think you may need a stronger link that unites them in particular that would make for a compelling comparison and analysis of the two together. Your topic seems really cool, though, and I’m excited to see where you take it ~

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