Jonathan Eng

  • Upon reading comments provided from both Professor Fleetwood and classmates, I can clearly see some issues that I have when writing essays. Particularly this essay, I saw myself lacking in transitions and points […]

    • I can also improve on my transition and topic sentences. I also had organization problems with my previous paper. I think that the topic sentence can become stronger, if you use it to tell the readers what the paragraph will be about. That will help improve the organization of the paper and it will help the flow of your paper.

  • My essay topic would be discussing the effect video games have on the player’s perspective of gender roles in real life. Originally it was going to cover the effect games have on color connections and views on e […]

    • I think that your essay topic is interesting.I think separating it based on topic would be better than separating by the games. That will allow your essay to flow better. It will also make your argument stronger, since all the common ideas are under one topic.

  • In the “Black Hole” there is a virus being spread among young adults. The virus in the book can be hidden and unnoticeable. It can be spread through sexual contact and people would get infected without knowing unt […]

    • I believe that the book might be more successful in teaching young adults about STD’s than a school speech. I agree with the points that you made in your argument. The “bug” represents AIDS and this allows the book to teach young adults about STD’s. The book shows the effects that a disease may have on an individuals life.

    • I too feel that “the bug” does quite accurately depict AIDS in Black Hole. It shows the contrast between the “life before and after the bug” most realistically and the feelings that might entail the experience. For instance, in the interaction between Chris and Rob for the first time, the book keyed in on the importance of having the respective partner in the know concerning one another’s health before engaging with each other.

    • I think that while the bug is a metaphor for AIDS I found it to be an exaggeration of it. It almost makes it look like getting AIDS or any sexually transmitted disease is horrific and therefore making teenagers want to stay away from it because of fear. I think Black Hole speaks on more of how society views sexually transmitted diseases.

  • I agree that educating young adults on sex and its possible consequences is a main part of the book. Rather than flat out explaining detrimental effects of sexually transmitted diseases, we are able to see how the lives of these average teens are easily ruined. Yes, the book does exaggerate dangers but it still makes a realistic view on what could happen.

  • I agree with your view on how these teenagers wanted to experiment, any simply failed. They never intended to get infected so they should not be ridiculed for it. But it is interesting on how the book has different effects on people. Rob is able to live a normal life yet some people get deformed faces which prevent a normal life. I feel the…[Read more]

  • I agree that the “Bug” represents HIV or AIDS. The book has readers witness average people during the outbreak of HIV where people are not too sure on how its being spread around. When people such as Chris get infected they feel like monsters and isolate themselves. They feel that they are visibly marked with sin so everyone could see. However,…[Read more]

  • It’s defiantly interesting that you mentioned the characters are all drug induced. That is a good possibility! People aren’t running from the disease when they see it, reinforcing your idea of not being able to distinguish reality from drug hallucination. I feel it’s a way of marking “bad kids” to show readers possible dangers from participating…[Read more]

  • It’s scary knowing that diseases can just appear and spread out of the blue! I agree that the article relates to the book very well. Like cancer, the virus in the book can be unnoticeable. And if it can be spread through sexual contact people will get infected without knowing. It was interesting when the book states the disease only affected…[Read more]

  • The idea of women being damsels in distress is common throughout all sources of entertainment, including movies. Women are supposed to appear weak, defenseless, and beautiful. The ultimate goal for these women is to have a handsome male character heroically save them or possible die while trying (Making him even more heroic?). Because of this idea…[Read more]

  • I completely agree when you stated that the horror movies are all the same plot. It has become harder and harder for jump scares because the movies do the same things over and over. Its either someone jumping out of nowhere, a loud noise, or a constant building of suspense. The viewers will know when something is going to happen, it all depends on…[Read more]

  • Video Games portray genders and races in a specific way to attract consumers. With the primary audience for video games being males, the game art is designed to satisfy a male audience rather than a female […]

    • Although a strong argument, I am going to have to disagree with you. I dont believe most games sexualize females and although you had statistics, you didnt give any example of the actual games. The statistics could have been based off of biased games rather than just a random poll. Lastly, i felt you began to get off topic when talking about races. it confuses the reader to whether you are talking about female roles or the races between characters.

    • You have a good argument but I have to disagree. Most games out on the market have you create your own character. Maybe the games the author used to create the argument were hand picked with those stereotypes within them and weren’t random. Giving a list of the games would have made your argument stronger. It’s like saying you have twelve apples in a bag but you secretly have twelve oranges, we wont be able to see if you are telling the truth unless you show us.

  • The article talks about how literature incorporates protagonists with disabilities as a way to have readers better understand where the characters are coming from. The text includes references from other books. […]

  • Lady Gaga and Beyoncé’s performances are very different from an orchestra performance. Lady Gaga and Beyoncé’s performances are spoon fed to the viewers in every way. There is no creativity for the viewer, only […]

  • Women were once viewed to have a negative impact on business.Women dominated festivals in the late 1990’s such as Lollapalooza and Lilith Fair scared promoters. With the audience being all male, they feared h […]

    • I agree with your opinion. Even though these female celebrities state they support feminism, they dont take action to actually change anything. They say it during interviews and at concerts but when it comes to the real actions they are not there. As you said, i feel they only do this to attract more female listeners that are actual feminists. Stating that “Anaconda” was a girl empowering song is just ironic due to the fact that all you say are women dancing with their butts.

    • I have to say that i agree with the your argument. I really like the fact how you took both artist and gave valid points such as stating how “sex sells” and how during important performances the artists would wearing exposing clothes. One thing that i wish you touched upon more was how even though they claim to be feminists but still go on and act like they are not. Overall I really enjoyed reading your blog!

    • Overall you made a strong argument and I see where your coming from. Personally I feel that although these women dress a certain way to “sell” their music, Nicki Minaj’s work has a deeper meaning than viewers see them it as. She tries to show both young and older women that you can take control of you own body and do what you want with it. As it said in the article ” As sexual beings, we’re allowed to indulge in self- directed pursuits of pleasure without shame.”

    • Recognizing the issues and complaining about them, without offering a solution is one of the laziest forms of “activism”. Are these celebrities really behind the statements they put out? Or was it hours of rehearsed lines with their PR managers telling them what to say and how to say it to gain more publicity, similar-minded fans, and relevancy?